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Beacons in the Night

by J.C. Belding


Country winds blow softly across an open field.
Thin strands of fresh grass sway from side to side,
Illuminated by a rich blue sky.
Nature’s endless cloak, spanning beyond the horizon.
And scattered throughout this eternal backdrop,
Lies stars.
A heavenly mirage upon an earthly canvas.
Beacons of silver fire, casting forth their light into the deep darkness,
Burning for all of time.

Two years ago I returned to that very field.
Where the thin grass swayed from the country wind.
But in its place,
Lied concrete.
Cement,
Wood,
Steel.
A town,
Lighted by rows of streetlights,
By the bright, florescent glow of a gas station.
I looked up into the night sky.
Searching for the stars I had once gazed upon.
There were none.
Where once twilight fires sparkled in the night.
There was only darkness.
Where once a masterpiece was gloriously displayed in the sky,
There lied only the blank canvas.
Where once stars vigorously cast their light,
There were none.


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Fri Nov 28, 2008 6:37 pm
Bleeding Rose wrote a review...



I liked this very much. I liked it because it is something that is happening in modern time. All of the stars are staring to dissappear and I liked how you pointed that out. That is basically what this poem is aiming towards. Great job! I give it an A+! Keep writing.




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Thu Nov 27, 2008 8:55 pm
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I really liked this. I'm not entirely sure if I missed any hidden meanings, but I found this poem to be a good representation of the problems Humanity has caused the world. By urbanising the Earth, we're destroying it.

I can't see a lot to criticise. One teeny weeny thing, though, is there's no full stop/comma at the end of the eighth line.





grammar is hard and i dislike it immensely
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